On Monday the 30 August 2010 there was a show that was called the Iron Brion Roadshow. They came to our school to teach us about food. The first type of food they showed us was Meat and Meat Alternatives. They talked to us about how much iron there was in meat and which meat had the most iron in it.
Hi Trinity
ReplyDeleteYour words are good and descriptive and you are lucky because I did the writing for you because you went to Rainbow Reading you lucky boy.
P.S. You should do mine.
From Howard
Hi Tyla
ReplyDeletenice blurb you got there you had a awesome blurb
that was outstanding and my sister enjoyed it.
Hi Tyla
ReplyDeleteI really like your photo blurb because it is interesting to read!
Next time I think you need to work on putting more descriptives words or adjectives in it & you should not just say everything that happened & think about putting your opion into it.
Don't worry, those were just tips & your story is still great!
From Imarny
What a informative blub.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Imarny ,next time add lot
of describing words to add more sparkle and pizzaze.I still love your blurb even though
I said that.
I think you put
all your hard work and
effort into this.
I thought your blurb was filled
with detail.By
the way ,I cant belive
you remembered the first
food group and how to spell alternatives.
One of the best blurbs that i've read
so far.
Keep up the super tremendous work.
From your friend Katopau.
HI TYLA
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Hi Tyla
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Regan
Hi Tyla
ReplyDeleteI agree to with katopau and Imarny you could add alot then Miss Day might even find it so fascinating that she sends it to a magazine that is mostly read by kids!
keep up the good work!