Last time we were practising for cross county and when we were practising I was piggy-backing Keegan. I got tired and I told him to get off then we stopped.
Hi Jimmy I really think your blurb about cross-country was very funny. It expressed your feeling's very well.I felt tired after the run to,even though i didn't do much of the running.
Dear Jimmy, Your short story is nice and descriptive! Why were you piggy-backing Keegan anyway? Well done & I hope to see more fantastic pieces of writing! From Imarny.
Hi Jimmy Your blurb about practising for cross-country was amazing because of the descriptive sentences describing the picture of you and Keegan. Did you know I didn't really like running as well. It dosen't say in your blurb but I knew you didn't from the photo you looked puffed out. I like how you explained how tired you were after giving keegan a ride on your back! No wonder you always have great work. Keep up the awesome blurb writting. I hope to see more of your work this year.
I belive you have a good heart for helping Keagan because you must have not cared about the pain(If you felt it) and how many laps did you do with Keagan on your back?
Hi Jimmy
ReplyDeleteI really think your blurb about cross-country was very funny. It expressed your feeling's very well.I felt tired after the run to,even though i didn't do much of the running.
I hope to see more of your wonderful work!
Great job
Hi Jimmy
ReplyDeleteI liked your blurb because of how you told us you were getting tired and how you told him to get of.
Nice Job
Jimmy
ReplyDeleteI liked your blurb about you piggy backing Keegan.It must of been heavy as! keep up the good and funny work
Dear Jimmy,
ReplyDeleteI think that Keegan really just wanted to get out of running. Hahaha. Keep up the brilliant work.
Dear Jimmy,
ReplyDeleteYour short story is nice and descriptive!
Why were you piggy-backing Keegan anyway?
Well done & I hope to see more fantastic pieces of writing!
From Imarny.
Great job.
ReplyDeleteGreat description
of what happend.
I think Keegan was
lazy.
From Katopau
Hi Jimmy
ReplyDeleteYour blurb about practising for cross-country was amazing because of the descriptive sentences describing the picture of you and Keegan. Did you know I didn't really like running as well. It dosen't say in your blurb but I knew you didn't from the photo you looked puffed out. I like how you explained how tired you were after giving keegan a ride on your back! No wonder you always have great work. Keep up the awesome blurb writting.
I hope to see more of your work this year.
Hi Jimmy
ReplyDeleteI think your blurb was good and the picture was cool because you and Keegan.
Regan
I belive you have a good heart for
ReplyDeletehelping Keagan because you must
have not cared about the pain(If you felt it)
and how many laps did you do
with Keagan on your back?
HI JIMMYOU
ReplyDeleteMAN YOU ARE STRONG
JIM, YOU SHOULD OF
TOLD HIM TO GET OFF.
KIND REGUARDS
SULIASI